Sunday, September 22, 2013
2006 Question 1 Response 1A Analysis
Your first paragraph is well thought out, briefly mentioning the topics that will appear in the essay while taking a strong opinion about the mood. It is followed by a body paragraph that carries a punch and which explains the author’s use of diction and imagery with strong examples from the poem such as “stalks of time.” Examples like this demonstrate your well supported opinion of a “dark, foreboding” mood and shows the viewer that you understand poem. You have many examples and everyone supports your opinion making this response stronger than many others. Also you finish up with a powerful last paragraph which helps tie everything together and answer the prompt question.
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This essay was well written with elaborate explanations supporting the thesis statement. The essay used the techniques to further explain the point. In the introduction alone, the author wrote "diction used by the narrator conveys a mood of dark foreboding and illustrates the fallacy of humans in their beliefs that they can control time and the earth" also "the imagery of the hawk as the powerful master of time and judgement further underlines the fragility of mankind." Not only does the essay explains how the techniques relate to the story but also how it affects the story as a whole to a theme. The rest of the essay does an excellent job at expanding on the ideas from the first paragraph.
ReplyDeleteHey, Ana, quick note. I THINK we're supposed to be staying away from questions 1 and 2 for these posts. I'm pretty sure question 3 is the "open prompt," where the tester gets to choose what literature to use. I hate saying this because you did a really good job with all three of these responses, so I'm still definitely going to comment on them, but I'm just afraid if the essays you responded to in these posts count or not :/
ReplyDeleteAnyway, good job with this response! Although it can be detrimental to your health, I often try to approach reflections with the mentality of "It can always be better." With this in mind, one piece of advice I'd offer to you would be that if you can identify something that each author can do better, if you can verbalize it, that'll help you so much with your own writing. Just spotting potential improvements is great, but if you can explain it with words you explain it to yourself even better. Try to use that in these posts!
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